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Aircraft have been increasingly used transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Many individuals
interested
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 in the idea
that
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of
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 using aircraft
carry
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 fruits and vegetables
to
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overseas or some places can not
plant
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,
while
 some people think
this
not
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 a great idea On the one hand,
air
transport
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 that it offers many benefits.
Firstly
, it enables consumers to enjoy a variety of fresh produce
through
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 the year.
This
 can lead to a more balanced and nutritious yet.
Moreover
,
air
transport
 can boost the economies of developing countries by providing them with an export market for their produce.
On the other hand
, critics of our
transport
 point to its negative environmental impact the carbon emissions by our can contribute to climate change.
Furthermore
, opponents argue that
air
transport
 can make fresh produce
came
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 expensive
from
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 customers. In my opinion, the decision of whether or not to
transport
 fruits and vegetables by
air
 is a complex one that must be made on a
case by case
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 basis.
While
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air
transport
 to be mindful of its environmental impact and the potential for it to increase food prices. Ultimately, the goal should be to strike a balance between ensuring access to fresh produce for all and protecting the environment
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