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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. Some people consider it is a good idea, some are not. Discuss both views and your opinion.

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With modern technology, air transport has been increasingly used to provide agricultural products to many different countries where these goods are hard to grow or it is in an inappropriate season.
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, there is an argument about whether it is good to
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 an aeroplane to bring these items from
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 to
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 or
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 another form of transportation to do it.
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 essay will discuss both opinions and give the reason why the latter statement is better. First thing
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it needs to be noted that transferring goods from country to country by plane is really costly and not sufficient when needed to deal with heavy
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, compared with a seaway
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 much cheaper and more efficient because it can tolerate lots of products and heavy shipments.
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, nowadays we still
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 the waterway to ship merchandise from a
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 because it is more convenient and more affordable than the air highway.
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, it
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 needs to be known that Airway Express is faster and the risk of damaging objects in transit is much lesser than using a ship and train.
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, as it was said above the cost to do
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 way too high in comparison with the benefits it gives and is it better to only
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 route of transportation in an emergency situation.
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, other ways of shipping products from
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 to
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 are advancing over time,
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 that, the agricultural units are still fresh after a long journey and the money for it is lower and lower. So, it can be fair to say that exporting these
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 from
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 to
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 is unnecessary.
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, using an air highway to deliver goods is not sufficient and high-cost compared to other ways of transmitting
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.
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, it is still more beneficial to
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 other kinds of ways to ship
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 than planes.
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