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some people think that a sense of competion in children should be encouraged while others think cooperation both views and give opinio

#people #sense #competion #children #cooperation #opinio
there are numerous ways of
upbringing
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 today's
children
. talking about
competition
 some people say it is good to encourage
children
 rather than inculcate
cooperation
 in young minds to be successful in adulthood as some folks suggest.
this
 essay will include both of these notions and the opinion on the same. to embark, one of the paramount
rationale
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that
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 the sense of
competition
 in
children
 would bring up their determination and encourage them to succeed in future. as some humans think that the cutthroat
competition
 can make an individual realise the value of it.
this
 is
due to
 the fact that during the time of contesting with their friends or other people in the same age group, people learn many valuable lessons. sportsmanship is one of the greatest qualities that
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 have seen personally being indulged in individuals. and the tendency to adjust and think for the betterment of one own is
also
learnted
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learnt
 in my opinion, a sense of
neck- to -neck
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competition
 can teach many essential lessons in youngsters for life. despite
of
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the innumerable benefits of
competition
 among
childreen
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children
, few citizens believe that
cooperation
 taught to the kids is far more useful to
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 a good adult.
this
 means that teaching
co-operation
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cooperation
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 in them can make their life even more pleasant as a grownup. juveniles who are taught
of
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this
 can adjust to any group and can
also
 understand the needs of others.
children
 learning
cooperation
 tend to perseve tolerance and respect for others which is a learning for a lifetime. in
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 it is prominent that both
competition
 and
cooperation
 are key for a child as he grows they will definitely teach them lessons and eventually make them a proud human. it is the wish of their guardians to groom their child.
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