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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetable to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some consider it a good idea, some oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, aircraft are used a lot
of
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to
transport
 fruit to
few
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a few
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countries
increasingly
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apply
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. Because these
countries
hard
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are hard
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 to plant or out of
the
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apply
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season. Some people
said
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say
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 that it is
a
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good thinking
whereas
 others counter it.
This
 essay will discuss both views and give an opinion in the following easy. On the one hand, it helps improve
foreigner’s
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 relations
in
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between
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 two
countries
 and
help
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 people have
produces
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 to use.
Besides
 that, thanks to the development of technology,
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 have been a popular
transport
. And because of its high speed, products can
be
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be transported
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transport
 easily from other place to the others in a short time.
For instance
, in Vietnam where can not grow kiwi so they had to buy kiwi from New Zealand to use.
On the other hand
, using aircraft to
transport
 cause many problems
to
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for
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 the environment.
To begin
 with, air pollution has increased
instep
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 with the common use of
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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.
Because the
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 emission from planes contains a lot of carbon dioxide which have a negative effect on
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the health’s
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health’s
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health of
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 people and lead to respiratory disease. In conclusion, using aircraft to
transports
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transport
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 fruits and vegetables to
few
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a few
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countries
 have both advantages and disadvantage. But in my opinion, the advantage has more
benefit
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benefits
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 than.
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