The older people who need employment have to compete with younger ones. What problems can this create? What are some solution?

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Nowadays, older
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who hard to get jobs because they must compete with younger ones.
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caused by
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phenomenon is the number of older
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who are unemployed is increasing and the best positive solution for
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problem
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is
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government can impose laws on companies to stop discrimination against older workers. The foremost
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is the number of older
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unemployed is growing day by day. It should be
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that younger
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are becoming more
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and clever so most of
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employ them than older ones, so older
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have
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challenge
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jobs.
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result in a lot of older
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jobs to earn money, net mention their
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can be influenced too.
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, we can be seen that
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younger
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people
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always have more
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than older in every company. A possible solution to
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problem
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would be
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the government can impose laws on companies to stop discrimination against older workers.
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, the elderly can have more opportunities to apply for a job successfully and make their living. In conclusion, the competition
older
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between older
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people
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and
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younger
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is very hard for older ones. It
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many older
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unemployed and the best solution to solve
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I think
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that the government can impose laws on companies to stop discrimination against older workers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ageism
  • Generational divide
  • Technological advancements
  • Skills gap
  • Job scarcity
  • Industry preferences
  • Pension expenditure
  • Financial planning
  • Employability
  • Retraining programs
  • Upskilling opportunities
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