The table shows the number of people who took part in a national health survey between 2005 and 2009, answering questions about their sleeping habits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table shows the number of people who took part in a national health survey between 2005 and 2009, answering questions about their sleeping habits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The table graph illustrates the
number
of
people
taking the national health
survey
about their sleeping habits from 2005 to 2009.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the figure for
survey
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the survey
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has
been
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dramtically
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dramatically
drastically
increased over
all
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the period
year
. In more detail, in the
year
2005,
women
was
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three times
than
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more than
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men
who
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which
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stands
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at 3000
people
,
besides
in that
year
the total
number
of
survey
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the survey
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was about 8000. Next
year
, both
of
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gender rose significantly,
women
from 6000 to 12000 and
men
from 2000 to 36000, and
also
they completed 48000
survey
.
By contrast
, in the
year
2007,
women
and
men
had
became
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as
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the same
number
of
people
,
while
survey
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the survey
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increased to 64000.
In addition
, both
of
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gender turned to
same
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the same
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number
about 270000
people
, and
total
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the total
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survey
rose to 540000. It is interesting to note that in the
year
2008,
women
came to the highest
number
of
people
, around 331000
people
,
whereas
men
decreased slightly from 2007 to 2008 by 1000
people
.
This
year
of
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the
survey
came to 36200.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, survey, year, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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