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The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below shows the proportion of difference in income between males and females between 1979
to
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and
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 2008 in Japan,
US
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the US
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,
France
 and Australia.
Overall
, it is evident in the chart that there was a downward trend in all countries with Australia being an exception.
To Begin
 with, in 1978,the difference in income
among
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 males and females in Japan stood at about 48% hitting the peak of the chart, in the following years, there was a steady decrease to 41% and
if
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it
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 was the the highest among all countries in 2008.
Also
, in the same year, there was a similar pattern between
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Australia
 and
France
.
France
 stood at 20% with Japan slightly under it and they both decreased steadily with an intersection at 18% in 1998,
however
, Australia saw a rapid increase to 24% by 2008
while
France
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 slightly to 18% being the lowest amongst the five countries.
Furthermore
, the proportion of
difference
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 in allowance in
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 and UK was
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33% and 29% respectively. Afterwards, they both witnessed a slight fall from 1988 to 1998 to a similar percentage of almost 19% and eventually stood at 27% and 28% respectively.
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