It is often tought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the main cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this issue?
It can be considered that a high rate of juvenile delinquency is mostly related to
media
violence
. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this
statement. Nevertheless
, there are some solutions that can be taken to tackle teenage crimes namely limiting the watching time and controlling the media
.
Firstly
, violence
in the media
can an
adverse influence on youngster's attitudes and behaviors. Add a missing verb
have an
In other words
, watching violent films or playing this
type of video games
by young people may push them Fix the agreement mistake
game
mimicking
violent acts in real-time. Change the verb form
to mimic
For example
, some movie stars are good role models for teens to follow, so they can imitate their behaviors
like shooting, stealing or others. Change the spelling
behaviours
Hence
, they can be easily influenced because of their immaturity and lacking
of parental guidance. Replace the word
lack
Secondly
, the reason why media
may affect to commit
Wrong verb form
the likelihood of committing
crime
by minors is their mental diseases. Fix the agreement mistake
crimes
In particular
, this
mental illnesses can be affected by watching violent scenes.
Correct determiner usage
these
Finally
, there are two solutions to combat this
issue. On
of the effective ways is limiting the viewing time of violent films or online video games by them. Correct your spelling
One
Furthermore
, parents must set clear guidelines for using media
by their kids and they should involve them into
extracurricular activities. If parents Change preposition
in
will
monitor their children's Verb problem
apply
media
activities, it allows to
prevent a possible committing Correct pronoun usage
them to
crimes
by minors. Another measure is that governments have to Fix the agreement mistake
crime
stricter
control the mass Correct word choice
apply
media
. For instance
, all mass media
should be checked on
including harassment and inappropriate Change preposition
apply
contents
, which need to be banned by authorities.
Fix the agreement mistake
content
To sum up
, I believe that media
violence
is simply example
of real-world Add an article
an example
violence
for youngsters. However
, destructive media
contents
should always be restricted and these significant steps to protect young people from potential harm.Fix the agreement mistake
content
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