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Band 4.5

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •give contact details for when you are away •give instructions on how to care for your pet • describe other household duties You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ..................,

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Ayesha, I am writing a letter to request you to look after my home during
holidays
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. Before I
had been deciding
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decided
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 to go outside the city I was very bewildered
that
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about
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 who
will
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would
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 take care
my
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of my
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 home.
Besides
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this
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, I was worried about my cat because I
cannot
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could not
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 take her with me. Suddenly I did remember that you are the one who can take care
household
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of household
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 chores. I can blindly trust
on
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apply
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you so you will take care
my
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of my
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 responsibilities very well. I am giving you my contact details so you can in touch
me
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with me
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 all
time
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the time
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. My WhatsApp number is
all time
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always
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 available and it's easy
that
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for
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I
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me
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 would see my cat
with
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via
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 video call.
Furthermore
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, I want to inform the dearest pet she eats too much so be careful to give more than one packet of biscuits.
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, the Charwoman comes at 10 am in the morning so you will have to clean
all
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apply
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the house carefully. I
am satisfy
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am satisfied
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 with your potential
that
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and that
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 you will do all the
task
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 well. I am looking forward to hearing
you
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from you
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 soon. Best Regards,

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear
  • Thank you
  • I am writing to
  • Housesitting
  • Pet-sitting
  • Responsible
  • Phone number
  • Emergency contact
  • Feeding
  • Walking
  • Playtime
  • Cleaning
  • Watering plants
  • Taking out the trash
  • Collecting mail
  • Security
  • Well wishes
  • Best regards
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