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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea,but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Using aircraft as a vehicle to bring fruits and vegetables is a good way for
another
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another country
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countries
 where
cultivate
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cultivation
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is difficultly
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difficultly
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difficult
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Fix the infinitive
to develope
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develope
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develop
 or out of date. Many people think
that is
 a great idea,
whereas
 others do not think so. The writer of
this
 essay will debate both
side
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sides
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 of views and give the opinion in conclusion. On the one hand, aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to
soem
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some
countries
.
Firstly
, using more
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 to transport vegetarian foods can help poor states or
countries
 where
such
 plants hardly grow or are out of season improve their
life
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lives
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anf
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and
 decrease famine.
Secondly
, if
use
 more plants to help those
countries
, they will
very
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be very
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 pleased
of
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and it can
also
 make a good relationship with them.
On the other hand
, others do not think
that is
 a good idea.
Use
 more
aircafts
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aircraft
,
use
 more
fuel
 and more pollution for the Earth.
Firstly
, aircraft
uses
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use
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 a host of
fuel
 to active so it will
be increase
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increase
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 air pollution too much. As a
consequent
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,
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 was improved and our life will be threatened. For explain, nowadays
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 can not fly without enough
fuel
, one
time
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one-time
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fly
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flight
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use
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uses
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an
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a
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big
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large
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 amount of
fuel
 so
its
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it
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 very
waste
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a waste
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 of money and
cause
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causes
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 air pollution for not only
country
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the country
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 but
also
 the Earth.
However
,
help
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helping
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 other
countries
 with fruits and vegetables is
great
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a great
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 way to make a good relationship so in my opinion, I agree with
this
 statement because I think that
help
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helping
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 others is likely to help
myself
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me
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.
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