Nowadays there is a wide range of TV programs.But instead of watching educational programs news on documentary films, more and more people prefer to watch TV shows, soap opera, or serials.And this negatively affects knowledge acquisition skills.What are the primary causes of this tendency?

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lots of, different kinds of television
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shown
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tv
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people
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the people
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discuss that
instead
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operas
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entertainment
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programs,
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there should be more educational
programs
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shows affects
people
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side.
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issue. first of all, it is undeniable
people
show interest
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entertainment
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more than
documentary
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both films and news. maybe one of
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the reasons
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this
issue is
people
want to spend their time more thrilled. when they watch
this
kind of
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they enjoy and laugh. most
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people
have many problems in their
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.
thus
they just want to pay attention to different things for their health.
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for
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day by day. when they spend time
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funny things it helps for feeling them much better.
secondly
, directors of television
programs
know that watching
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serials and soap operas
bring
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more financial benefits to them.
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is why they are willing to create more
programs
like that.
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