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you had recently ordered a book, online from a bookseller. The book sent by him was not the latest edition, even though you had paid the money according to the latest edition verion. Write an email to bookseller in about 150-200 words. your email should include complain about the service of the online site and state about the urgency of the latest edition

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 email to complain about the
book
 that I recently ordered through your online website. Please allow me to explain.
Firstly
, I ordered the latest edition of the
book
 called "The Secret" written by Rhonda Bryan and I paid the price that was claimed for
this
 latest edition 2.0.
However
, I received an older
version
 of
this
book
, which is $100 less than what I paid for.
Moreover
, I did not receive any confirmation email from the website as it was mentioned in the terms and agreements of the site.
Furthermore
, I ordered
this
book
 because my friend was very desperate to read the latest
version
, so I thought that I could give
this
book
 as a birthday gift. Since
,
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 I received an incorrect
version
, I am afraid that I will not be able to give
this
 on
this
 specific occasion. I would like to bring
this
 to your attention to take appropriate action, and I would really appreciate it if you could make
this
 situation any better by sending the latest
version
 of
this
 copy on or before the 5th of November. Thank you for your time and consideration. Regards, Rita
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