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Many believe living in big cities comes with more advantages than residing in the countryside. Do you agree or disagree with this?

#cities #countryside
These days a lot of people believe that living in big
cities
 is better than living in the
countryside
 and comes with more benefits,
while
 others may not agree.
This
 essay will discuss both opinions and will draw my personal conclusion.] On the one hand, living in big
cities
 comes with a lot of advantages
such
 as the variety of shops and
also
 multiple job opportunities,
also
 it may come with disadvantages
such
 as the hustle and bustle or the number
of
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population.
For example
, the city will be awake and noisy 24/7 which means you will not be able to sleep well,
also
 usually the city is more expensive.
On the other hand
, living in the
countryside
 comes with a huge amount of benefits that are only related to a peaceful, quiet and healthy environment.
However
, you will have less opportunities to get your dream job .
For instance
, you live in the
countryside
 and you want a specific position, but unfortunately, the town you live in doesn't have
this
 job so you have to search for something you don't like. In conclusion, after a careful analysis of both points
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, I would recommend living in a big city
than
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 living in the
countryside
, because in my opinion people who live in the
countryside
 always come to the big
cities
 next to them.
However
, people who live in
cities
 most of them have never visited small towns.
In addition
, both sides have their advantages and disadvantages, and it depends on the personality and the salaries.
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