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Some young people believe it’s best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Like how there are two sides to a coin, the debate on whether young
people
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 who have transitioned into the adult phase of life, must stay or leave their
hometown
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, is
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 two-sided.
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 some believe that it's better to stay in one's
hometown
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, I unequivocally agree that moving out would help in character development.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand,
adults
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 must stay in their
hometown
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 to keep in touch with their roots.
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 is because, for a lot of
people
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, their
hometown
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 is a part of their cultural identity.
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, moving to a new place could lead to loss of cultural identity which could
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 result in mental health issues
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 as anxiety and depression.
Moreover
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, young
adults
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 could
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 face a lot of pressure in a new environment and in certain circumstances, adapting to a new place could be a challenge.
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, a study published by the University of Texas concluded that 40% of
adults
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 who have moved to new areas have been prescribed
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anxiety medications
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 feeling overwhelmed all the time.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, I believe moving out of one's
hometown
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 is a good change for a number of reasons.
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, it makes
people
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 come out of their comfort zone which fosters personal growth.
Secondly
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, they are made to rely on themselves which teaches young
adults
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 certain responsibilities.
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, only when I moved to Banglore did I learn how to be financially responsible. Until
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, my parents took care of all my finances.
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, experiencing different cultures help
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 understand the world better and helps them develop into a socially conscious person.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 there are drawbacks
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 as suffering from mental health issues
while
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 moving to a new place, I believe that the advantages of moving out outweigh the disadvantages. The major benefits include experiencing a new culture and personal growth.

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