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Nowadays parents give more freedom to their children than in the past. Is it a positive or negative development?

In recent years, parents have grown more conscious of the importance of allowing their
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 to enjoy more independence.
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 seems to be a largely welcome tendency, there is a drawback as well. A notable upside is that young
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 are highly likely to develop an outgoing personality should they be granted more control over their own lives. Left to their own devices, these minors get to form relationships with whomever they want to, thereby expanding their circle of friends. In
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 way, they tend to experience the enjoyment of having a fulfilling social life, which makes them more of an extrovert than an introvert. Of course,
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 sociable
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better mental health in their adult life. An added benefit is the fact that
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 have the opportunity to go after their passion. With little supervision over them, these adolescents can,
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, practice a sport they are keenly interested in or take art classes which appeal to them. By having the freedom
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 in what gives them genuine satisfaction, they are more liable to succeed than if they were to be coerced into an activity that they do not really like.
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, it is
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 worth noting that giving
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 absolute freedom might result in them going astray. We all know the dangers existing in our society today: drug addiction,
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 religious sects, to name but a few. A case in point is a late teenage
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 of mine who,
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 lack of parental control, managed to go to Syria after coming into contact with ISIL supporters and died therein fighting for
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 militant group. Had he received due attention from his parents, he would perhaps be alive today. In conclusion, there are substantial reasons to argue that letting
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 enjoy more freedom is a
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commendable development;
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, there is
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 the possibility that
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 will choose the wrong path.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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