the pie charts show The percentage of the working day adults spend doing difference activities in a country in 1958 and 2008.
The pie charts display the proportion of activities performed by adults during the day in a country between 1958 and 2008.
Overall
,it is evident that there's a significant increase in the proportion of young people working over the years.
To begin
with, In 1958,almost a third were engaged in Sleeping, however
, there was a steady decrease by 2008. Furthermore
,the rate at which people went out with their families and friends witnessed a drastic fall to 6% in 2008.
Additionally
, the figures at which individuals travelled to work and relaxed at home rose to 8% and 13% respectively. Although
, the proportion for
engagement in other activities remained constant at 6% from 1958 to 2008.
Change preposition
of
Finally
,A significant surge was observed in the number of persons
working, as it skyrocketed from almost a third of the entire percentage to 42% by 2008.Replace the word
people
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