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I am writing to refer Mr Phillip who is planning to move

Maroubra

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for his multiple sclerosis treatment. He requires your continued care and support. Mr Phillip was presented to the clinic with diagnosed multiple sclerosis,type 2 diabetes and chronic left and right

legs ulcer

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. He

was commence

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on antibiotics and anti-diabetic medicine. He has monitored the signs of his MS relapse and his blood sugar level.Both his left and right

legs

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dressing were changed.He has

educated

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regarding the risk associated with diabetes as he has been

non- compliance

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with diabetic medicines. Mr Phillip lives alone and has two sons.he has been managing his needs

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his pension. He has experienced loneliness

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isolated

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,he has stable mental health. I would highly appreciate it if you could take over the management of the patient.please ensure his IV antibiotics switch to oral antibiotics but continue his same anti-diabetes medicine and

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monitor his dressing. Please refer him to

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wales

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diabetic clinic regarding his medication review and

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education on diabetes by

doctor

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. Kindly help him to contact a neurologist for MS

follow up

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, kindly help him to contact with

social

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worker to cope

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his situation. Yours sincerely Nurse

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

206 words

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