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Many universities students wants to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other feels it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualifications. Discuss both the view and give your own opinion.

#universities #students #subjects #addition #time #attention #qualifications
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It is irrefutable that, education is the key
of
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 success and after completing
the
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apply
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schools
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school
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 individuals go to
the
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universities and colleges
for doing
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to do
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 their higher studies in
a specific fields
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a specific field
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. As universities
provides
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education in different
subjects
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 sometimes it attracts many students to have other optional
subjects
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 with their major studies.
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While several
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 individuals believe that student should provide their
priorities
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to
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studying their main
degree's
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degree
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 subject
instead
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 of other
subjects
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.
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 discuss the topic in the upcoming paragraphs. To dive into the topic, numerous
universities
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scholars
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 take
interest
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an interest
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 in learning other
subjects
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 with their main
subjects
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 because some
scholars
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 have
the
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 keen interest in learning new
subjects
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 which helps them to enhance their knowledge.
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, many students
wantd
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wanted
want
 additional
subjects
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 as
a
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 extra curriculum activity.
Which
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 helps
scholars
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 to reduce their study stress and
motivate
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then
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them
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 to do more handwork. Flipping to the other side, many people
holds
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 the notion that students should give importance to their major studies because if
scholars
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 learn additional
subjects
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 it will distract them
to learn
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from learning
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 major
subjects
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 which is
curical
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crucial
 for their qualification.
Further
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, learning additional
subjects
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 can create
the
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 burden on
scholars
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 as they already have so many main
subjects
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for
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 study which is very hard for them and additional
subjects
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with
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them
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will lead
problems
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to problems
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. Pondering on
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both
opinion
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opinions
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, I opine that learning different
subjects
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 will
helps
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help
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scholars
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 to explore new things . It may
also
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 lead them to know about their talents and interests which
result
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results
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 them a better career option.
To
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the
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conclusion , learning
addition
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additional
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subjects
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 will
benefits
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individual
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individuals
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 to do something different from their comfort zone
.but
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but
 additional
subjects
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 should always be optional for the student because it may lead them to take
interest
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an interest
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 if they want.
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