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Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world

#homelessness #cities #world
The lack of stable, safe and adequate housing
is risen
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rises
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 in many cities worldwide. Homelessness,
from
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 my view, is caused primarily because of the absence of means and abilities to obtain a house, which translates into poverty. The constant changes that the
world
 has experienced and the great advances have mostly
favored
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 the upper class of society,
further
 impoverishing the middle and lower
class
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classes
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. Nowadays, access to quality
education
 and resources has become a real challenge for the less fortunate in many cities around the
world
.
This
 has led to part of the population not being able to reach the star of
education
, which in turn results in a poor population without opportunities. Thanks to
this
, many of these people find themselves unable to obtain housing, which often causes
this
 condition of homelessness. To solve
this
 problem in the long term, governments around the
world
 should focus their efforts on offering quality public
education
 in schools and universities. Unless the problem of access to
education
 is not resolved in many countries, poverty will continue to increase in the
world
. The wealth and resources that each country offers must be distributed equitably
,
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 so that we can enjoy a healthier and happier society.
On the other hand
, the current situation with the homeless could be resolved by creating shelters where these people can stay, and at the same time
educate
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 them and
open
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 employment opportunities for them, with the aim that they can develop their lives within society, paying their fees. As we can see,
this
 is a problem that could continue to grow if the correct measure is not taken at the proper time.
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