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The chart illustrates internet usage among a copuntry's population given by age group in 2010 and 2017. Summarise the onformation by selecting and reporting the main features, amke comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates internet usage among a copuntry's population given by age group in 2010 and 2017. Summarise the onformation by selecting and reporting the main features, amke comparisons where relevant.
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The proffered line chart shows the proportion of
internet
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 usage among one country’s population by
age
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 groups between 2020 and 2017. Broadly, it is readily palpable that the vast majority of people who used the
internet
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 came to the 16-34
age
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 group in 2010 and 2017
while
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 the minority was the
age
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 group of 65-74. Looking at the chart, in both years, the group aged 16-24 recorded around 95% and 98% respectively of the total population using the
Internet
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. The using of the
internet
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 decreased
due to
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 the
age
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 factor. People aged 25-35 experienced a steady decline, making up just over a quarter per cent in both years.
This
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 decrease happened when people aged 35-44, in 2010, it reported a relative decrease and it deep drastically when they aged between 65 and 74, the
using
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 of the
internet
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 made up only about 10% in 2010.
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, the downward trend happened as well in 2017, a marginal or gradual decrease occurred between the ages of 45-54 and 55-64, and it droughted around 30% when societies aged 65-74.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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