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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households on one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting nd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households on one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting nd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The proffered line graphs provide information about the proportion of households with electrical appliances and illustrate how many
hours
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 of housework per
week
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, per household from 1920 to 2019.
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, it is readily noticeable that the changes in ownership of electrical appliances experienced an upward trend throughout the
period
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.
In contrast
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, the number of house of housework reported a downward trajectory. Looking at the chart, the use of washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners started at 40%, 30%, and below 5% at the beginning of the
period
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. In terms of using refrigerators, the change skyrocketed significantly to 90%.
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, it had a stable trend which levelled off at 100% from 1980 to 2019. Regarding the use of vacuum cleaners, there was a dramatic growth throughout nine decades (1920 to 2000), it peaked at 100%
at the end
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 of the
period
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. The use of washing machines showed a marginal rise in 1960, accounting for below two-thirds per cent, the fluctuation trend occurred during 40 periods but it rose slightly and peaked at just 70%. The decrease in housework
hours
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 per
week
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 happened from 1920 to 2019. At the initial
period
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, it comprised 50
hours
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 per
week
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, per household. It plummeted to 20
hours
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 per
week
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 in 1960 and decreased slightly in the 20 subsequent years.
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, there has been a steady decline in recent years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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