In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?
in many parts of the world, the number of flora and fauna is getting lower and lower. I believe that
this
is happening because humans are excessively exploiting those beings for their advantage, and the solution for this
development is to recover their numbers using the help of technology
and science.
One of the reasons this
happens is because human beings are excessively taking advantage of animals and plants. Humans need animals and plants to fulfil their hunger needs by turning them into food. Not only that, people also
make use of flora and fauna natural habitat and turn it into housing and roads which leads to those beings struggling to find shelters and provision to live. For instance
, in Indonesia there is massive deforestation in their biggest natural habitat due to
the development of public housing and the number of biota has sharply declined since then
.
One way to tackle this
issue is to utilize science and technology
to recover the species numbers. This
can be done by doing research around the issue causing the problem and supported by technology
to recover the endangered species back to its prime. For example
, in 2015 China stated that pandas were going extinct because of the low number of their food in nature, but then
a group of scientists created an imitation of their provisions using technology
and successfully lifted up the endangered status.
In conclusion, flora and fauna are declining due to
people immoderately utilizing those species for their own good. However
, applying the knowledge of science supported by technology
can be a possible solution to tackle these problems.Submitted by rizkyrizalzal on
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