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The plan below show the lyout of a university's sports centre now, and how it look after redevelopment

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The presented outline illustrates the future construction plan of a particular university sports centre in
a
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floor
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 plan.
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, it seems the distinguishable future construction is planned to facilitate and accommodate students with more features and areas for
the
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apply
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sport
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sports
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 activities.
To begin
 with, both the west and east outdoor courts will be constructed with several features which
enlarged
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 the indoor area.
Extra
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An extra
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 pool will be available in the
north west
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northwest
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 which can be used for relaxing after challenging sports
activity
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activities
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 that can be done in the huge sports hall. Several dance studios will be introduced to the students which allow them to practice dancing. If customers would like to buy some
sport
stuffs
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 or tools, the
sport
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sports
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 centre will provide a new
sport
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sports
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 shop in the
south west
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southwest
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 of the building just
infront
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in front
 of the leisure pool. To accommodate more comfort to the students, a café is available just beside the
south east
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southeast
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 changing room of the building.
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