People in the community now could buy cheaper consumer goods. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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goods

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became cheaper,

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could have

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choice for affordable commodities. Despite the fact that the phenomenon can

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some drawbacks, the benefits still overwhelm the disadvantages Cheaper

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bring numerous pros.

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Consumer

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can purchase diverse types of good, especially good for

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the household

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which has limited income. Cheaper

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help poor people to get enough

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for their life more easily. The gap between well-off and poor people will be

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, everyone can have a more equilibrium life. The energy will be purchased more which contributes to the development of

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has many drawbacks. A massive demand

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to be satisfied but the profit is too small for the businesses.

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may lead to

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reduce

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products

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quality. With the lower quality products,

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consumer

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the consumer

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will lose their trust in those product's manufacturers.

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deal

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a lot of damage to the economy. A massive demand

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a massive factories

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pollutions

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. In conclusion, the benefits of cheaper

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still overshadow the

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of its

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

180 words

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People in the community now could buy cheaper consumer goods. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease,governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, owning a homes rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some countries, the role of a mother differs in some ways from the role of a father. Why do you think these differences exist? How might parental roles develop in the future?

Most high level positions in companies are filled by men eventhough the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50%female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain % of these positions to women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?