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The following diagrams show a current map of Peyton Park and a plan for proposed changes. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following diagrams show a current map of Peyton Park and a plan for proposed changes. Summarize1 the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration below depicts the current layout
plan
 of Peyton Park and the changes that will take
palce
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place
 after its
redevelopement
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redevelopment
.
Overall
, there will be more shifting of the existing locations in the park rather than adding new ones.
Children's
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A children's
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 play
area
 and a swimming dock are going to be constructed in the newly proposed
plan
. The layout
plan
 of Peyton Park as of now consists of a lake in the centre
,
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 and is surrounded by a parking lot on the south side, a tennis court located on the west and a picnic
area
 situated on the north. The proposed
plan
in
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for
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 the future is
also
 going to have a lake in the centre with
newly
Correct article usage
a newly
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 constructed swimming dock on the west boundary of the lake. The tennis court will be relocated on the east side and the
picinc
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picnic
area
, though being present
on
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at
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 the earlier stated location will have a children's play
area
 added next to it. There will be no changes made to the location of the parking lot.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plan, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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