The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts delineate the difference between online shopping
sales
in Canada in two years, 2005 and 2010 in four sectors. It is discernible that the proportion of online sales
for each of four
sectors changed significantly after five years from 2005 to 2010. Correct article usage
the four
While
the rates for video games, food and beverage increased, the other two sectors witness
a decline.
From the period time 2005 to 2010, the figure Wrong verb form
witnessed
of
food and beverage climbed from 22% to 32%. The ratio of internet Change preposition
for
sales
of video games also
has a slightly
increase.
Notably, the Change the adverb
slight
percent
of online Change the spelling
per cent
sales
of the
home furnishings fell sharply to 15% in 2010. The electronics and appliance sector Correct article usage
apply
witness
a decline from 35% in 2005 to 30% in 2010.Wrong verb form
witnessed
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