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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in societyQq

#dangers #people #habit #societyqq
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In the world today, the dangers of smoking are completely known;
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, a lot of people are still continuing it. In
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 article, I will set forth the causes of
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 trend
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 and
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 suggest some solutions to clear up
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 problem.  First and foremost, smoking is an addiction.
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, when someone starts smoking, it is very difficult to stop himself. The reason might be the fact that
nicotine
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 is responsible for
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 effect. When
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 consumes the
nicotine
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, it sends a signal to the brain with
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 message: the body needs more
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.
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, that person has to light another cigarette, and
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 is what an addiction is. So
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 individuals are aware of how dangerous
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 habit is, they can not prevent themselves. In order to solve
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 issue different solutions are considered.
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, people have to be informed. They have to
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 in classes,
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, those that help them to reduce the number of cigars they smoke each day.
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, through rehabilitation programs and the like they can lead a more healthy life.
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, when the former solution is not effective, they have to go to the camps. In these camps, they are given some syrups with lower
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 content, including methadone.
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, helps them to survive.
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,
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 the addicted community are aware of the dangers of smoking, they do not tend to stop themselves. The chemical compound accounts for
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 misbehaviour, but attending some classes and camps can be introduced as a probable suggestion.
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