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The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.

The pie charts below show the percentages of expenditure on different items in the USA.
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The pie chart above shows the expenses of items in The USA in the year
of
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1966. The graph shows the percentage of
Food
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, Cars, Petrol, Restaurants, Furniture, Computers, and Books
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expenditure
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expenditures
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.
On the
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The
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food
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food,
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 outflow shows
a
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44
percents
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percent
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 of
Food
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disburesement
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disbursement
 as the highest
costs
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cost
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 of the USA. on
the
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The
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 second highest
expenditure
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 type is Cars rate ranging
on
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 23%.
This
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 overhead comes with the
expenditure
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with
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of
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 the 9% petrol outflow rate. On the smaller usage, the people in
the
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1966
are
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were
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 less likely to spend their money on leisure activities expenses
such
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 as
computers
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computer
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 costs as shown in the data
only
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at only
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 1% , Restaurants
on
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 7%, and housing costs needs like furniture
in
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 just 10%.
Overall
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, the highest
expenditure
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 of the
USA
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US
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 people in the year 1966
are
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was
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 on essential
need
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needs
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, like
food
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 and drink;
accomodation
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accommodation
; and household needs. Not so on the entertainment side.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • budget
  • housing
  • transportation
  • food and drinks
  • healthcare
  • education
  • categories
  • percentage
  • financial burden
  • prioritize
  • mobility
  • services
  • sprawling
  • indulging
  • culinary experiences
  • groceries
  • importance
  • coverage
  • allocation
  • miscellaneous expenses
  • entertainment
  • personal care
  • leisure activities
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