Air freight have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it.

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various
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the age or change the season. Some citizens think that way is a great
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whereas
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people contrast
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that idea. In
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like
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the plane
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plane
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to
transport
healthy
food
.
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,
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plane
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can be used to
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food
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be
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faster
in
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far
distance
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than
another vehicles
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. Aeroplanes
also
can be a transportation to trade different types of fruits and
vegetable
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vegetables
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with a lot of
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around the country and
world
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.
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,
this
way will improve the relationship to each
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. For
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,
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really
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popular
about
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durian so
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will trade that to take cherries in America.
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food
to poor
countries
by
plane
show
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that
it
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really important and
show
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that
wealth
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countries
respect poor
countries
.
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was not really grow
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up fast but
countries
around really
respect
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and
like
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Vietnam
.
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,
transport
by
plane
will increase the price of that
food
,
increase
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VAT so when the product
go
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to the
costumer
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customer
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will
really
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expensive
that
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make
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poor people
do
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not have enough money to
try
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.
Furthermore
,
this
way will
use
a lot of
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to fly faster. Next
with
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that
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,
use
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plane
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also
make the environment more badly by smoke. Taking everything into account, I believe that
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aircraft to
transport
fruits and vegetables
have
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more benefits for the government
also
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for the citizens because that
help
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people who live in
the
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countries
do
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not plant like
Africa
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in Africa
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or
improve
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the quality for citizens.
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