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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some coutries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it at a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#aircraft #transport #fruits #vegetables #coutries #plants #season #people #idea
The
exploaionn
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exploitation
 of
aircraft
 on delivering fruits and
vegetables
 to several nations where can hardly have plants or
other's
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 reasons.
However
, the opposites have
the
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different
opinion
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opinions
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. The author of
this
 essay would agree with the idea of using
aircraft
 to help the poverty or nations which have
own
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 reasons. It is vital to understand that the using of
aircraft
 could help a country
becomes
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 better. There are several developing countries or undeveloped countries
need
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 more help from the world. The
supplyments
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 of
aircraft
 could reduce the poverty in Africa or nations
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which
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have
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the
goverment
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government
 could not afford stable lives for their residents. The fresh fruits and
vegetables
 give
human
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humans
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 from those areas a good condition of living.
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 lands could hardly grow plants
due to
flood
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floods
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, drought or natural disasters made
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human's
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healthy
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 return to unhealthy way because
of
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the reduction of plants and
vegetables
 could rescue
human
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humans
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 from unhealthy
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 without fresh food and improve
thier
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their
 daily
life
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lives
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 with better
condition
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conditions
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.
However
, it can be thought that
aircraft
does
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 not always
use
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used
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 for
the
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a
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 positive purpose.
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Humans
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Human
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 can use the
aircraft
 not only
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for
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to
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 transport
the
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fruit
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fruits
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 and
vegetables
,
and
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also
use
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to provide drugs or addicting products.
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a
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research at the environmental
istitute
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institute
 in California
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shows
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slows
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 that 27% of the carbon dioxide released into the atmosphere, affecting the air quality of numerous countries are what air;ine are responsible for
this
 immense amount of toxic chemical
subtances
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substances
 emitted
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into
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 the air is what needs to be concerned more than famine and crop losses. In general,
although
airline
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makes
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a
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good transportation, does not mean that
it
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they
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 should be
over used
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overused
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.
Otherwise
, the world will have to face more serious environmental problems in the next decade leading to much more significant consequences.
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