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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out season. Some people consider it a good idea, some are not. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Out season or hardly grow plants have been
risely
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precisely
 transported by plane.
Majority
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 of people
believes
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 that
this
 should be
considerd
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considered
 as an effective
transport
 method
while
 the others affirm the contrary. Personally,
this
 writer
approve
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 that
air
transport
 is greater basis
due to
 the less time-consuming
sevicing
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servicing
 related to preservation It must be understood that most organic products seem to have
short
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lifespan
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, which means they are more vulnerable beyond
bateria
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bacteria
 and other environmental elements.
Therefore
, to meet the market's quality
requirments
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requirements
, those vegetables
is
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are
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 compulsory to be as fresh as possible.
As a result
, the majority of flights have been used to bring out-season fruit globally.
On the other hand
,
air
transport
 can provide many disadvantages. To elaborate,
solely
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 businesses which have financial potential can adapt to
this
transport
 basis.
Thus
, limiting the popularization of their products
to
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the
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overseas.
Consequently
, there must be a decline in national income in conjunction with the predicament caused by unsold fruits from small enterprises. At
this
 point, using aircraft to transfer those plants
definitely
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an
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 useless method.
According to
this
 writer's knowledge, hardly grow plants should be transported using aircraft
due to
 the fact that they are extremely valuable in
international
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the international
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 market.
In addition
, the income from these agricultural goods can compensate for the shipping fees.
As a consequence
, enterprises can still
develope
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develop
 despite the huge expenditure for
air
transport
. Applying aircraft in transporting organic goods might still
in
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be in
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 discussion.
However
,
this
 writer has outlined the reasons for choosing
air
transport
 as
finer
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a finer
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 basis
according to
 many beneficial aspects.

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