Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in their adopted countries, immigrants should abandon their old ways and adapt to local customs and codes of behaviour. Do you agree or disagree?
Many
countries
in the world have war, disease and so on so Use synonyms
that
a low quality of Correct word choice
apply
the
life Correct article usage
apply
of
resident raise Change preposition
for
desire
to migrate to other Add an article
the desire
countries
. But they have to integrate into society in other Use synonyms
countries
, Use synonyms
newcomers
should try to adapt to local customs and codes of Use synonyms
behavior
. Personally, I completely agree with Change the spelling
behaviour
this
view.
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Firstly
, the option Linking Words
to
Change preposition
for
newcomers
should find out everything about the law in Use synonyms
that
Correct determiner usage
those
countries
is attractive because if they do not obey Use synonyms
law
, society would not function properly. Add an article
the law
This
can be explained by the fact that road rules Linking Words
have
different in each Verb problem
are
Use synonyms
countries
so Change to a singular noun
country
newcomers
can make Use synonyms
accident
if they do not know. Correct article usage
an accident
For example
, some Linking Words
countries
allow owning a gun but in other Use synonyms
Use synonyms
countries
gun is not allowed to use. Add a comma
countries,
Therefore
, immigrants are deported back Linking Words
their
Change preposition
to their
countries
by the government in new Use synonyms
countries
.
Use synonyms
Secondly
, immigrants should remember that societies are built on shared values so they have to respect that. Linking Words
This
is because Linking Words
in
the world Change preposition
apply
have
many different cultures Correct subject-verb agreement
has
make
the Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
countries
Use synonyms
are
more interesting. Unnecessary verb
apply
In
the other hand, if the Change preposition
On
countries
have a lot of different cultures, people feel they do not belong there so societies are weak. So that the similarities between people bring them together Use synonyms
while
the differences pull them apart. Linking Words
For example
, if two Linking Words
countries
Use synonyms
is
close and their resident Change the verb form
are
migrate
, their Change the verb form
migrates
countries
have cross-cultural Use synonyms
because
many cultural combine, Add the preposition
because of
exchange
. Correct word choice
and exchange
As a result
, many people in new Linking Words
countries
can settle down and make new generations understand two cultures.
In conclusion, it seems to me that Use synonyms
newcomers
should adapt to local customs and Use synonyms
behavior
because they must integrate to improve Change the spelling
behaviour
the
life in new Correct article usage
apply
countries
. It is advisable that the government should make Use synonyms
condition
Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
to
for immigrants.Change preposition
apply
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task achievement
Provide a clearer thesis statement at the beginning of the essay.
coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
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Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and article use.