The chart below shows the change in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the change in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
The line graph illustrates the
number
of three different types of
offenses
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(burglary, car theft, and robbery) that were committed in Machester city centre over nine years from 2003-2013.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
number
of burglaries decreased, but the
number
of car thefts increased over the years.
Moreover
, the
number
of robberies did not change a lot. With regards to burglary, it started at less than 3,500
cases
in 2003, and it
then
increased to 3750 in 2004. After that, it dropped to more than 1000
cases
in 2008. In the end, it stood at less than 1,500
cases
. In terms of robbery, it started at more than 1,000
cases
in the first year, and it stood at the same point
at the end
of the period.
On the other hand
, the
number
of car thefts started at around 2500
cases
in 2003. After that, it fluctuated and reached 2500 after seven years. It
finally
stood at less than 3,000
cases
in 2012.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.

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