The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The given graph illustrates changes in three types of crime (burglary,
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theft and robbery) which were committed in Manchester City over 9 years between 2003-2012 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
number
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of burglaries dropped significantly over the given period,
while
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the
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of
car
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thefts increased gradually. At the beginning of the period, burglary was the most prevalent crime in Machester City, but after 2006,
car
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theft became the most committed crime. With regards to the
number
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of burglaries, it began with 3400 cases and
then
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peaked at about 3700 in 2004 before falling dramatically to about 1400 in the
last
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year.
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, approximately 2300
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thefts were perpetrated in the first year, after which it gradually rose to 2700 cases in 2012 and reached the highest rate in the
last
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six years.
In contrast
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, the
number
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of robberiescrimes was at about 600 in 2003 and reached a peak in 2005. After that, it declined slightly to approximately 600 crimes in the
last
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year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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