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This diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

This diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.
#process #plastic #bottles
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This
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a
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diagram
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represents
 the
process
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for
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 recycling
plastic
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bottles
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. There are
sereval
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several
 steps involved in the
process
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 of recycling.
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,
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plastic
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bottles
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is
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 recycled and it produces
a useful
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a useful product
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products
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. We should reduce the use of
plastic
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bottles
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 in our daily
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lifestyle
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. In detail, there are some methods for recycling
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plastic
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bottles
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 they are
puting
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putting
 the
wastes
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waste
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 into the garbage,
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transferring it
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 to the transport, recycling centre,compressing
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it into
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 blocks, crushing,washing, producing
plastic
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 pellets,heating pellets to form raw materials and producing end
products
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.
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 we should put the
plastic
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 into the garbage and
those
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 waste including
plastic
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are
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been
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 carried by
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transport for the next
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. The
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 is recycling centre,
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 sorting. They separate the
plastic
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bottles
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 from the other waste
products
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. Those
plastic
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bottles
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 are compressed into blocks
it
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 is the fourth
process
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. They are been crushed and put into the tub for washing. The sixth step is producing
plastic
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 pellets and they are heated, to form raw materials. The raw materials are formed and
final
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process
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 is producing some useful
products
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. We the people should reduce the usage of
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plastic
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 items. We should make our environment look neat and clean.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, plastic, bottles, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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