The graph gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007

The graph gives information on households with a regular use of a car in Great Britain from 1971 to 2007
The picture illustrates the processes by which pineapple
juice
,pineapple
jam
and the export of boxes of
pineapples
through oceans are done.
Overall
,it is important to note that the
process
commences with grinding
pineapples
into smaller slices for both
jam
and
juice
and ends by either extraction of
pineapples
for
juice
or cutting of
pineapples
into small slices.For export,the
process
involves 3 main stages, beginning with washing and waxing big
pineapples
and ending with the transportation of packaged
pineapples
through ships.
Firstly
, the grown
pineapples
under 28-30 centigrade of sun heat are washed with water .
This
is the phase when the
process
diverges,all
pineapples
which are 26 cm in size are grated into smaller slices, and
then
they are extracted by special machines.
Finally
,the pineapple
juice
is ready to be consumed.In terms of
jam
, the
process
begins with cutting
pineapples
into small sizes after which cut
pineapples
are packed in
jam
cans. Looking at the third product,
pineapples
which are mixed with chemicals and are 30cm in size are washed with wax in the first step.Afterwards,they are packed in boxes ,and
at the end
stage, they are transported by ships through oceans.
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