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some jobs are based at single work place where the hours are the same each day, while other jobs involve frequent travel and irregular working hours. discuss the advantageous of both types of job and give your own opinion about which one is the best

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many works
are depend
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 on working in
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a
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one
place
 with the same period everyday. In fact, that will help them to manage their
time
 easily.
On the other hand
, there are a kind
if
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of
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jobs
 which ask you to travel and
working
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 in different hours. Actually,
this
help
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 you to enjoy
while
 you working. On
one
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 hand, working
on
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specific
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place
 every
time
have
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 many advantages for many people.
First,
it
help
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helps
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 them
managing
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 their
time
. In
the
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other
word
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, knowing when you
work
 will help you to deal with occasions and how you can spend
you
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time
 with your family.
in addition
, it makes you familiar with the
place
 that you
work
 in.
For example
, many workers in Aramco company loved their
work
 because they
were
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 working
their
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there
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 for a long
time
 which they are familiar with
Although
 working in
one
place
 has many benefits, working on
jobs
 which you
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include
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traveling
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travelling
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 has a couple of advantages. A First reason is that you can visit many places
while
 you are working.
For instance
, you can
work
 in Dammam for three months after that you can move to Riyadh to
work
their
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. Equally important is the fact that you can learn
another cultures
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another culture
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.
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in other words
, You can interact with other
peoples
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people
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 in different
country
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countries
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 and talk with them. In conclusion, Both
jobs
 have many advantages which can benefit any person. Working in
one
place
 for specific hours provides the
stabilize
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 for you.
However
, personally, I believe that working in
jobs
 which
includes
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include
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traveling
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travelling
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 is better because I’m very
passion
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passionate
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on
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about
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 learning about other cultures
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