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The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top 10 countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart elaborates the head ten countries for the manufacture and expenditure of electricity in 2014.
Overall
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, the maximum number was shown in China,
while
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 the minimum figure belonged to Korea in that year. In detail, the proportion of the production and consumption in the big countries, China,
US
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the US
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,
Russia
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and Russia
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 were well above 1000
bilion
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billion
. In the other group of countries ; India, Canada, and France it changed and reached
minimum
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a minimum
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462.9
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of 462.9
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bilion
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billion
 in 2014.
On the other
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hand
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 the
number of
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apply
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output in Brazil and Germany were just above 500
bilion
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billion
,
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however
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however,
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 it was different for consumption. In Korea the
utilizing
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utilisation
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 of electricity had
lowest
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the lowest
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quantitiy
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quantity
,
this
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 number was 485.1 for industry and 449.5 for
outlay
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the outlay
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.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • top 10 countries
  • production
  • consumption
  • overview
  • compare
  • significance
  • data
  • electricity
  • regional differences
  • factors
  • influence
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • closing statement
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