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34.The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

34.The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graph displays the number of families by annual remuneration in the United States in the years 2007, 2011 and 2015.
Overall
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, the number of
households
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 has increased for four out of five ranges of earnings, where the ones with $100,000 income increased the most, and the range from $75,000 to $99,999 fluctuated. People belonging to the range of $100,000 or more income, had the largest number of
households
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 with just under 30
million
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households
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 in 2007,
this
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 decreased moderately in the next four years by 2.6
million
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, but from 2011 to 2015 it rose dramatically to approximately 38
million
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. The second with most
households
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 are the ones with earnings between $25,000 and $49,999, which in 2007 had just over 26
million
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,
this
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 climbed steadily in 2011 and 2015, with 30
million
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 and nearly 29
million
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 respectively. 25
million
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households
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 were from individuals that had 25,000 or less annual wages in the first period, in the next period
this
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 grew gradually to around 29
million
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, but in the
last
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 year, it dropped by 1
million
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. Individuals situated between $50,000 and $74,999, in 2007, they had just above 20
million
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households
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,
while
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 in 2011 it rose by 1
million
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, and it was maintained in 2015.
Finally
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, in 2007 just under 15
million
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 families had an income of $75,000-$99,999,
this
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 increased about 4
million
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, to 19
million
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, but in 2015 it went back to 15
million
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • households
  • income distribution
  • peak
  • rise
  • fall
  • stable
  • significant
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
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