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36.The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

36.The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar graph displays the answers
of
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to
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 a questionnaire about individuals’
habit
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habits
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 in purchasing
coffee
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 and tea in the
last
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 four weeks in Australian cities.
Overall
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, the most common habit is to go to a café for
coffe
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coffee
 or tea. Adelaide has a proportion higher at buying instant
coffee
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. The other significant feature of
this
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 graph is that fresh
coffee
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 is the least sold. In Hobart approximately 63% of people went to a café for
coffee
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 or tea, 1% less
that
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than
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of
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apply
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Melboune
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Melbourne
 in second place, which had a percentage of around 62%, followed by Sydney with 60%.
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Birsban
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Brisbane
 and Adelaide had nearly 55% and 49% of individuals respectively that went to a café.
Birsban
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Brisbane
 had the highest proportion of people going for
a
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an
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 instant
coffee
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, which was a 54%,
then
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 was Hobart with approximately 52%,
while
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Adeleida
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Adelaide
 had a similar
portion
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proportion
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 as those who went to a café, which was a percentage of 50%. Sydney had the least number of people purchasing instant
coffee
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, with 45%, which is 3% less than Melbourne. Fresh
coffee
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 was bought principally in Hobart, with a portion of 48%, followed by Sydney and Melbourne with around 43% each. Brisban and Adelaide had a similar proportion, which was almost 35% for each one.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, café with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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