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The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.

The graph below gives information about car ownership in Britain from 1971 to 2007.
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The line graph compares the percentage of Britain households
reagularly
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regularly
 using their own private transport over a period of 36 years.
Overall
, the population of people having one
car
 was the highest and stayed almost unchanged,
while
 the number of
household
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households
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 with three or more
cars
 was the
least
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lowest
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. It is
also
 clear that the figures for no
car
 and two
cars
 dramatically changed. In 1971, almost half of the population of people in the UK had no
car
 and the households having one
car
 only were the second most populated group. Those with three
and
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or
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 more
cars
 had by far the
least
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lowest
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 proportion of
population
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the population
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 with roughly 2 per cent of them and only 8% of households used two
cars
. Over the following 36 years, The percentage of families with one
car
 almost
leveled
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 off
in
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to
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 about 45% and remained the most popular group,
while
 the less number
pf
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of
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 people had no
car
 until
in
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2007 there were only 25% of them. household started
havin
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having
havin'
 two
cars
 with a dramatic rise of around 20%,
although
 three
cars
 and more category had an unconsiderable increase stayed under 8%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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