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city needs Shopping mall or Park give your opinion

#city #mall #park
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I believe that constructing the Shopping Complex is
an
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 viable option .As it creates employment
opportunties
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opportunities
 and improves the
City
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 income.Apparently,it provides the entertainment . To start with ,
Shoppping
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Shopping
 Centres
generate's
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generate
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 numerous jobs for many Skilled workers.To illustrate , these days
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a
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huge number of people are migrating to big cities for good
career
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due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of jobs in the City.
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,many chefs in the City are moving to Atlanta for better opportunities. Another outcome of the complex is it increases the economic conditions of the Town by the taxed income.
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lack
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 of public
funds
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funds,
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 many streets don't have proper Roads and water
facility
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.
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 , hanging out in
the
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apply
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restaurants and
theaters
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theatres
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 will entertain both young and old citizens.As these days people are depressed with their routine lifestyle.
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,It can be said that
their
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 are more advantages than drawbacks.Again, these are my personal views,but I will support any decision taken by the Local Council.I thank you for the opportunity
provided
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to express my views.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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