Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performance on the screen and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
digital era, especially after the COVID isolation, people are getting used to staying at home and enjoying their life Linking Words
independly
. Correct your spelling
independently
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mundane leads to a thoughtful discussion on whether live entertainment performance is still necessary in the Linking Words
21
century.
The accessibility of watching Correct your spelling
21st
performances
via digital devices plays a big role in prioritizing an online broadcast Use synonyms
than
a live one. Taking Change preposition
over
Olympic
games as an example, its audiences Correct article usage
the Olympic
spread
across the globe and Add a missing verb
are spread
living
in diverse time zones. Without recordings, but only live Wrong verb form
live
events
, audiences in other parts of the world may not Use synonyms
able
to engage in it. Add a missing verb
be able
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also
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in the Change preposition
from participating
performances
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due to
mobile difficulties.
Other than accessibility, online Linking Words
performances
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also
prevent any undesired accidents from happening. It is not rare to learn about accidents in crowded Linking Words
events
: In the Summer Splash festival, some participants were Use synonyms
being
hit by glass bottles when the gang was dancing and playing around; Korean residents stepped on each Unnecessary verb
apply
others
during Halloween Change to a singular noun
other
last
year when they were pushing to move forward, leading to numerous deaths and injuries; The same incident happened in Hong Kong during 1997 as well. Live Linking Words
events
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compare
to online ones put participants at risk.
In spite of the accessibility and safety concerns that streaming Wrong verb form
compared
bring
, there are definitely some benefits brought by live Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
performances
. Live Use synonyms
events
connect us by creating shared experiences and Use synonyms
the
special atmosphere together. Listening to musical concerts is a prime example of how it bonds people. During Eason's concert, all participants sang the same golden song together to thank him. Meanwhile, they all laughed when Eason shared some of his funny stories. These connections are precious in the sense that screen watching may not Correct article usage
a
able
to bring.
All in all, live and online Add a missing verb
be able
performances
are both needed as they serve different purposes and with different advantages. Their Use synonyms
existences
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existence
allow
more choices for consumers to choose from. Correct subject-verb agreement
allows
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flexibility is Linking Words
also
crucial to ensure a good quality of life. Linking Words
Therefore
, both should be maintained for Linking Words
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our future Remove the article
apply
well-beings
.Correct your spelling
well-being
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