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A growing number of people rely on restuarants and convenience food(frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

#people #restuarants #convenience #food #meals
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In
this
 modern era,
every day
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 number of people
are increase
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 gradually
while
 they need to more depends on hotels and other
redymade
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readymade
ready-made
package
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packaged
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food
 for easy cook
instead
 of
home made
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homemade
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food
 to provide most of their menus. There are many
of
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prons
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pros
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 and cons of consuming
this
 type of eating
habits
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habit
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. I will give my inclination in
ensuring
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ensuing
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 paragraphs. On the one hand, nowadays folks are
leaving
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living
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in
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fast paced
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 life so that they have
no
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not
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 enough
time
 to make their own meals.
First
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 and foremost advantage is
save
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to save
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the
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time
 and effort to
prepared
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 it.
Moreover
, no more usage of utensils because every convenience
food
are
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 available
to
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good
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the good
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 package which
are
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is
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 directly
to
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put in
microwave
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the microwave
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 and just ready in
few
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a few
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 minutes.
As
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For
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 instance, Tesco Cheese pasta and sandwich, wasabi Susi, Pizza of Dominos.
Secondly
, no need
to
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for
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 any cooking skills
for
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prepare to them.
Moreover
, individual
having
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have
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 a variety of
choice
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choices
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 to select their
food
according to
 their taste and budget.
On the other hand
, there are many demerits
also
connect
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connected
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 with
this
 Frozen
food
 or packed
food
. One most important
that
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it
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there
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 is not
any
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no
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 proof regarding health concerns. Restaurant foods have more taste
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which
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that is
 why
individual
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individuals
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having
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have
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 a great portion or extra sometimes.
As well as
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,
individual
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individuals
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having
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have
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a
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no idea how much spices
added
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are added
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on
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that
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in addition
, they
could not
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cannot
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 control the unhealthy ingredients.
However
,
this
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these
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 types of meals are more expensive as
compare
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compared
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 to
home cooked
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home-cooked
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dish
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dishes
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.
As
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 example, if we
preparing
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prepare
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a balance
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balance
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 dish at home might be approximately 20£ but
this
 same plate price in
hotel
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the hotel
a hotel
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 is around 30£ or more if grand restaurants would take
extra
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an extra
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 service charge. In
conclusions
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conclusion
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, it is
exceptable
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acceptable
 that
persons
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people
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 are more on
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a ready
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ready made
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ready-made
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 diet because they
have
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do have
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 not enough
time
 to make them so that it's
save
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saves
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the
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money,
time
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and time
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 and easy to prepare for anyone because not
required
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require
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 any cooking skills.
But
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, it is not healthy
as well as
 more expensive and nobody
sure
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about
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whether
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usage
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 of ingredients
are
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is
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enough
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apply
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healthy or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rely on
  • restuarants
  • convenience food
  • frozen food
  • packaged meals
  • home-cooked food
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • variety of choices
  • cooking skills
  • health concerns
  • lack of control over
  • ingredients
  • expensive
  • potential
  • overeating
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