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several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. some people say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People's opinions differ as to whether or not minority
languages
 should be invested in and that governments have to protect them from dying out.
While
 I support the idea that there are by far more important sectors to be managed, I still believe these
languages
 should be saved. There are a variety of reasons why it is argued that the expenditures on the less-spoken
languages
 are
such
 a waste.
Firstly
, there are already important fields in societies education, the tourism industry, and transportation, that governments are more responsible for.
For example
, from an educational point of view, if a state does not have a qualified system for its education, it characteristically would be ridiculous to tackle the problems related to an unknown
language
.
Secondly
, people might think there would not be any place for a traditional endangered
language
 in
this
 modernity and even its users are switching their spoken to a more practical, common alphabet.
However
, I would support some reasons related to why it is better to allocate a sum of money to survive these rare ways of speaking. There are racial areas in which residents have linguistic intolerances
due to
 their firm connection with their culture
as well as
 customs and by not considering the survival of their maternal
language
, governments will face several objectors from locals.
Furthermore
, a huge number of modern
languages
 came from older ones and it is historically and linguistically valuable.
For example
, English has its roots in the Latina and by keeping
this
language
 alive we are being provided with numerous access for derivations. In conclusion, despite several categories that are important for the whole society; I believe that at least some budgets should be spent on the
suvilance
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surveillance
 of endangered
languages
.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states your position and provides a preview of your main points.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Make sure your conclusion effectively summarizes your points and restates your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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