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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?.

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Choosing the right career options is an important step
of
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 someone’s professional life. In these times, people chose to be an entrepreneur
instead
 of working as an employee. There are a number of factors that cause
this
 trend,
such
 as work-life balance, opportunities, and flexibility.
In addition
, the downfall of being an entrepreneur will be proven by its risks.
Firstly
, when an employee
decided
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 to resign from a company and start their own
business
, it gives them more time to concentrate on building their own venture.
Furthermore
, working two jobs simultaneously will hinder their
business
 progress.
As a result
, the venture will not deliver its expected
products’
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products
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 value, and the venture will be shut down because it will not generate
noticeable
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 amount of money.
Secondly
,
work
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working
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 as
businessman
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a businessman
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 often comes with its risks. Even though the startups successfully develop great products, there is no guarantee that the products will be accepted by the market.
Moreover
, resigning from the company means that they will lose their income, and the consequence of
this
 is that they
had
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 a time limitation. The tight sources of time and money
forces
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 the founders to think creatively in running their
business
.
To sum up
, an individual often
chose
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 to resign from the corporation to pursue
business
 opportunities, but options often come with its minus, which is the
sources
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source
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 limitation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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