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The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about birth and death rates in Switzerland from 1970 to 2020 according to UN statistics. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrated bar chart provides comparative data about
death
rates
 and birth
rates
 between 1970 and 2020 in Switzerland by UN statistics
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the birth
rates
 were increasing every year,
while
 the
death
rates
 had both increased and decreased. It can be seen that there were 1.2
million
 new babies with no change in both 1975 and 1985.
Moreover
,
it
Correct pronoun usage
there
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 was a jump from 1.2
million
 to 1.7
million
 for the birthrate in 1995.
Furthermore
, the birth rate in 2005
was rise
Change the verb form
rose
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 dramatically to over 2.5
million
.
Lastly
, there was an upward trend from 2.7
million
 to over 3.5
million
 from 2005 to 2025.
On the other hand
, it is apparent that
it
Correct pronoun usage
there
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 was an upward trend in the
death
 rate between 1975 and 1995, as it rose from 1
million
 to 1,5
million
.
However
, it changed to a downward trend
in
Change preposition
from
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 1995 to 2025 because the number of
individuals
Fix the agreement mistake
individual deaths
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death
chage
Correct your spelling
changed
 to less than 1
million
.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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