While some people consider global warming to be the most pressing environmental problem which we have at the moment, others believe that deforestation has a more devastating impact on our world. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

In today's time, most individuals opine that the utmost environmental issue is global warming,
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others vocalise by suggesting that the globe is more badly hit by deforestation. In the forthcoming
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I will discuss the effects of pollution
as well as
rapidly
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increasing population on
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nature and will
also
explain why I opine that global warming is more devastating than
deforeastation
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deforestation
. On the one hand, the advent of technology has made the lives of people easier by replacing
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with automation and machinery. There has been a significant rise in the proportion of industries being set up, which ultimately contribute majorly
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polluting the
enviornment
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environment
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of machines as a part of one's daily life generates a
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heat, which eventually
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a major role in increasing the average temperature of the earth.
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,
according to
a
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survey, the
sea-level
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sea level
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has risen considerably enough to endanger
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of humans by
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in
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of floods and
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. It is solely
due to
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the melting
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of glaciers which is
occuring
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occurring
due to
a rise in the average
temprature
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temperature
.
On the other hand
, the population around the world is rapidly increasing. To
accomodate
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accommodate
the populace more and more forests are being cleared for setting up new civilisations for them. Forests are not only the prime source of fossil fuels but
also
provide shelter to the vast fauna. Cutting them down
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exposes these susceptible creatures to the deadly open world resulting in
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reduction in the
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of surviving species. These creatures are responsible for maintaining the ecosystem by balancing the food chain.
For example
,
according to
an estimate by environmentalists, the world is going to run out of fossil fuels in the next 100 years. The ecosystem will
also
be severely deranged because of the extinction of particular animal species all attributed to deforestation.
To sum up
, both global warming and deforestation are major environmental concerns but humans are working towards finding an adequate replacement for fossil fuels making the latter issue less important. I opine that
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organisations and
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civilians throughout the globe should give their undivided attention towards reducing global warming. Reducing all types of pollution and judicious use of machinery can help tackle
this
cocern
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concern
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Greenhouse effect
  • Industrial emissions
  • Sea levels
  • Extreme weather events
  • Biodiversity
  • Carbon emissions
  • Renewable energy
  • Paris Climate Accord
  • Carbon cycle
  • Soil erosion
  • Water cycles
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Reforestation
  • Sustainable forest management
  • Indigenous communities
  • Localized impacts
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