The graph below shows the average number of movies seen in a theater per year, by age group. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares people of three
age
groups viz 18-24, 25-44 and 45-65 for the number of times of
films Change preposition
apply
watched
in a theatre every year during the span of fifteen years, Add a missing verb
were watched
that is
from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
, the frequency of watching movies
rose significantly for 18
-24 Correct article usage
the 18
age
group and it declined considerably for the rest of the two age
zones over the course of time. The middle
Correct your spelling
middle-aged
age
group topped the charts for seeing cinema whereas
the yougest
ones accounted for the least during the beginning of the timeline.
The individuals belonging to the 18-24 Correct your spelling
youngest
age
group watched 10 movies
in cinema halls in 2000, this
value rose slightly to 12 films in the next five years. The amount remained constant till 2010 before finally
clocking at 14 movies
by the end of the time line
.
Correct your spelling
timeline
In
the beginning of the timezone, around 12 and 15 Change the preposition
At
movies
were watched in the theatres by the populace belonging to
25-44 and 45-65 yearsVerb problem
aged
,respectively
. Correct word choice
old,respectively
After
this
the value experienced a constant decline throughout the course crashing up at Add a comma
this,
aprroximately
5 and 8 films, respectively in 2015.Correct your spelling
approximately
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, movies with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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