The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

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The illustrated pie charts provide comparative data about the nutrition between macaroni and medium baked

potato

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Overall

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it is clear that

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carbohydrate was the main nutritional in both menus.

However

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, protein is still one of the main

nutrient

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nutrients

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in both dishes. It can be seen that over 30 per cent of baked

potato

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is made of carbohydrates. Followed by protein for one-fourth of the whole dish.

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, there was the same amount of glucose and other nutrition in baked

potato

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, 15%.

Lastly

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, saturated fat was one-tenth of the menu.

On the other hand

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, it is apparent that over one-half of macaroni was carbohydrate, which is almost double

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apply

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the carbohydrates in baked

potato

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, there

were

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was

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over 20 per cent of saturated fat, which baked

potato

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had two times less.

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, there was the same amount of protein and glucose for more than 10%.

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, it was other nutrients for 5 per cent in macaroni.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Vocabulary: Replace the words potato with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

155 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

nutritional consistency
carbohydrates
proteins
fats
vitamins
minerals
fiber
proportion
component
pie graph
comparison
significant
balance
healthy
dietary choices
implications
absent
presence
macro-nutrients
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